Some people believe that schools are no longer necessary because students can study well at home through the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Technology has made it convenient for

students

the young to gain knowledge at home;

therefore

, studying at

school

is regarded as unnecessary by some people. I totally disagree with

this

view and here are reasons for it.

First

of all, studying at

school

contributes to

the

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educational equity. There is no doubt that learning online makes

students

available to plenty of academic resources, educational tutoring provided by high-qualified teachers and other learning networking websites.

However

, for those children living in poor areas, studying totally based on

internet

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causes a large financial burden and there are not enough facilities to support

this

way of

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leaning

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, which means that face-to-face education at

school

still is the easiest and most cost-effective way for them to acquire knowledge.

Additionally

, compared with distance education,

school

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provides

students

with much more than academic help. Well-experienced teachers at

school

are more likely to train

students

to be well-bonded persons and teach them plenty of social graces,

such

as how to respect their peers, strengthen the bond with others and do well in teamwork.

What is more, studying at the

school

does great help in keeping

students

concentrating on their work. It_s widely believed that, without supervision, the younger generation tends to abandon themselves and be

addictive

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to electronic games when surfing the internet, which will lead to unsatisfactory grades and mental problems, or even juvenile delinquency. Teaching staff at

school

play an increasingly critical role in preventing them from game addiction.

For example

, taking the phone to

the

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school

is usually forbidden.

In conclusion, studying at

school

is considered

as

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a better choice compared with studying online, especially for

students

who are relatively not very rich and self-controlled. (276 Words)

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