A big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that a huge income is more crucial than feeling fulfilled at the workplace.

This

essay totally disagrees with that statement. I am of the opinion that feeling satisfied with your

job

is necessary for your

career

growth and development, as well as for reducing the risk of developing stress-related health problems.

First

of all, pursuing a passion leads to success in the

career

.

In other words

, only when a person is happy and satisfied with his

work

, he will be motivated to do an excellent

job

and accomplish remarkable results.

As a result

, he will gain

work

experiences and achievements, which are required for his

career

growth and success in his particular field.

For instance

, my uncle is passionate about coding and inventing mobile applications. Due to his diligence and hard

work

, his

career

thrives, and he was even featured in Forbes 30 under 30 list.

Furthermore

, having a high position

job

with a huge paycheck doesn’t guarantee a happy, contented and

disease free

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life.

In contrast

, the higher the

job

position is, the more stress a person will have to deal with,

thus

increasing the risk of developing stress-related health diseases, both physical and psychological diseases,

such

as obesity, diabetes, hypertension, stroke, depression, anxiety, and etc. According to a report commissioned by Australia, due to high levels of stress and

work

pressure, senior executives have a 30% higher chance of developing early onset of stress-related disorders than those in

entry level

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jobs.

Hence

, having a high paid occupation is not worth it.

To sum up, I strongly believe that having a

high income

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occupation is inferior to a sense of accomplishment at

work

, as

job

satisfaction is necessary not only for better

job

performance and

career

success

,

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but

also

for living a happy and healthy life.

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