It is often argued that a huge income is more crucial than feeling fulfilled at the workplace.
essay totally disagrees with that statement. I am of the opinion that feeling satisfied with your
is necessary for your
growth and development, as well as for reducing the risk of developing stress-related health problems.
of all, pursuing a passion leads to success in the
.
, only when a person is happy and satisfied with his
, he will be motivated to do an excellent
and accomplish remarkable results.
, he will gain
experiences and achievements, which are required for his
growth and success in his particular field.
, my uncle is passionate about coding and inventing mobile applications. Due to his diligence and hard
, his
thrives, and he was even featured in Forbes 30 under 30 list.
, having a high position
with a huge paycheck doesn’t guarantee a happy, contented and
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life.
, the higher the
position is, the more stress a person will have to deal with,
increasing the risk of developing stress-related health diseases, both physical and psychological diseases,
as obesity, diabetes, hypertension, stroke, depression, anxiety, and etc. According to a report commissioned by Australia, due to high levels of stress and
pressure, senior executives have a 30% higher chance of developing early onset of stress-related disorders than those in
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jobs.
, having a high paid occupation is not worth it.
To sum up, I strongly believe that having a
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occupation is inferior to a sense of accomplishment at
, as
satisfaction is necessary not only for better
performance and
success
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but
for living a happy and healthy life.
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