Over the past few years,
has significantly raised due to the origin of a wide range of alcoholic brands and
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in different advertisement placements. In front of
have divided into two groups, there are ones who claim that the government should increase taxes on alcoholic drinks and there are others who think that
should remain a personal responsibility. The
paragraphs examine both sides of the argument until to reach a reasonable conclusion.
, it is clear to see why so many
will support the levy increase. One of these reasons is the discouragement of
and promotion of a healthy lifestyle.
have to know how irresponsible
can ruin their lives and how to solve it if it happens/occurs.
, the governments could administrate beverage taxes in a positive way,
affected by alcoholism and helping them to reconstruct their lives.
of the argument, there are some reasons against the measure. In the
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the violation of free will right.
have the primary right to choose and decide what is better for them. In case of imposing the measure,
will act against their will and that will produce general discontent in the society.
but not the least, why everyone should be punished and paid the same price?
, it is unfair that occasional consumers of beverage drinks should pay the same price as reckless consumers.
In conclusion, I think the governments should protect
always allowing the right of personal decision.
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