Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music, film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no public or government restrictions on what they do.

Creative

artists

should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music, film) in whichever

way

they wish. There should be no public or government

restrictions

on what they do.

Creativity is a feature

which

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comes inherently and needs freedom for expressing itself.

Therefore

, I think that not only

artists

but all creative

people

should always be given freedom but with some

restrictions

.

Firstly

,

artists

have natural skills which help them to convey themselves in a beautiful

way

, to show the deficiencies of the environment

which

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surrounding

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them. Unfortunately, in several

cases

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their work of art restricted or banned by certain authorities.

Moreover

, in some

cases

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they were threatened by the kings, presidents, prime ministers etc.

For instance

, Azerbaijani writer Nasimi was threatened and murdered by the government nearly 500 years ago for his brave words.

Secondly

, we are

people

and we have to be controlled because we live in communities and without

ruling

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we should be confused. If some artist paints, writes or creates something without damaging

people

physically and mentally there will be no

restrictions

against him/her because we live in

a

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21st century and we have some democratic laws. But every artist has to obey the rules and laws of his/her government. They can illustrate the real face of the system which they live in but without insulting somebody_s personality.

Thirdly

, nowadays it is inevitable to face with films, pictures, poems which includes criticism, message etc. There are several regulatory bodies in every country which control, check these things. Undoubtedly, there some

restrictions

which try to adjust their creativity but real

artists

don_t be afraid of any

restrictions

because of their thinking.

To sum up,

every

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of us who lives in the world

have

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the right to be free. We born free because god creates us in that

way

. Expressing ourselves in a freely

way

our natural right, but, unfortunately in certain autocratic

countries

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people

have to keep

silence

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because they have not any choices. Especially, in these

countries

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it is too hard to find real

artists

because of the restriction.

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