Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

In recent years, the percentage of

crime

rate

has been increased due to several

reasons

.

However

,

in

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the following paragraphs will

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the causes and how to overcome these

reasons

and find the most effective ways to reduce

this

rate

.

To begin

with, it is commonly believed that using

drugs

and narcotic substances will lead to

development

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and increase the

rate

of

crime

because

,

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these people who used

drugs

frequently or

addictive

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people

they

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are not truly conscious.

For example

, the addictive person may make lots of crimes to get extra money to be able to buy more

drugs

.

Although

, we live in an age when many of us are believe that the

criminal

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scene in lots of

movies

will encourage and contribute

in

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raising the criminal

rate

. The younger generation

start

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to imitate what they see in these

movies

.

Also

, they try to act like the actor and simulate these action scenes

on

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reality. Some scenarios of these

movies

describe the culprit as a victim and give so many

reasons

to gain

the

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empathy from audiences.

As a result

, we need to find solutions to overcome

this

increasing

of

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crime

rate

. One of these strategies

are

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we

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need to control and prevent using

for

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drugs

and narcotics material to eliminate the main reason

of

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rising the

rate

of

crime

.

In addition

, we should monitor what our children see and we need to make an effective discussion with them to illustrate and explain that , there is no excuse to do

crime

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.

To conclude, after

analysis

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both

reasons

and some effective solutions to reduce the

rate

of

crime

we can say that we need to restrict and prohibit using of

drugs

to reduce

crime

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the crime

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rate

and we should make an effective discussion with our children and monitor what they see in the

movies

.

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