In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

These days, shoppers now prefer to do their buying at bigger shopping

centers

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or malls.

As a result

, small local shops have gone out of business. In my opinion,

this

is a negative development because it would increase the unemployment rate and

also

, discourage future small business owners.

Firstly

, small

businesses

have always been extremely beneficial to the public and

this

is because they offer

variety

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of homemade products as compared to the products found in shopping

centers

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which are

mass produced

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at factories without the consideration of the consumers.

For example

, buying a scented candle from a small business owner is different from buying the same product from

the

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shopping mall.

This

is because

smaller scale

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businesses

,

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are always creating creative ways to satisfy their customers like; organising candle making classes by showing the public the process of making the candles, offering personalised packaging, sending their customers newsletters informing them of new products etc.

Furthermore

,

smaller scale

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businesses

have provided sources of employment for lots of people. Some people these days, do not necessarily find jobs after their higher education due to overpopulation and fewer jobs

instead

, they start up their own

businesses

to sustain themselves. If these

businesses

are not given the opportunity to thrive, lots of people would be out of jobs and

this

can contribute negatively to the economy of a nation.

In conclusion, shutting down of small scale

businesses

are happening because of the continual establishments of shopping

centers

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and malls which, is not necessarily a bad thing but the negative effects of losing small

businesses

is more adverse and can cripple

a nations economy

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in the long term.

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