In the modern world, it is no longer be necessary to use animals and animal products for food, clothing and medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion based on your knowledge and experience.

Humans have used animals for personal benefits and luxury for years. With the advent of modernization

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trend of using animals for our desires and in our everyday requirement has become redundant.

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has become possible with the help of technology as the

use

of animal products in food, clothing and

medicine

can be substituted by other products. I believe that animals must not be harmed in any way just for the sake of our pleasure or happiness. Harming other creatures where we can substitute is cruel and it

also

affects the natural ecosystem of the planet.

Firstly

, animals are as much deserving

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living beings as humans on planet earth. When we can substitute the required products made from animals with other materials

then

animals must not be used for anybody_s pleasure.

For example

, the very popular puffed jackets have substituted the dreaded crocodile skin jackets made by killing the innocent animals for the sake of fashion.

Also

, the

use

of animals in medical science in the making of any new

medicine

has been reduced with new technology substituting animals with robots.

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type of innovative methods has deemed the

use

of animals in food,

medicine

and clothing unnecessary.

Despite the cruelty in using animals in food, clothing and

medicine

some people still see

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sage of animal products justifiable.

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is due to high demand as many people have become vegetarian and given up clothing made up of animals,

consequently

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this

has generated a high demand with

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igh price to

use

certain animal made products,

therefore

people flaunt these products to showcase their financial status.

For instance

, the rich businessman often uses animal made products to depict their superiority.

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cruel behaviour despite the substitute must not be promoted as it hinders the natural ecosystem of the planet.

To conclude, the usage of animals in our daily needs and for our pleasure shall not be promoted as it not only hinders the natural ecosystem but

also

a terrible thing to do. In order to stop the

use

of animals where we can

use

other materials shall be strictly banned by the government to save innocent living beings from being slaughtered.

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