In
day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on the opinion that it is easier to have good
in rural areas while other
argue that there are a lot of advantages about
when inhabitants settle down in
. From my perspective, I subscribe to the former idea.
On the one hand,
living in the
may have a healthy lifestyle by virtue of the following reasons.
, many records prove that the atmosphere in rural areas
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usually purer than the air in
,
, residents settling down in the
will be less likely to be prone to
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diseases.
, living in the
will help
avoid suffering from illnesses in terms of food poison.
can be explained by the fact that they can supply safe food for themselves,
, the food security issue in
area is
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definitely guaranteed.
,
of purchasing vegetables in the market,
residents can grow them in their gardens, so they do not have
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about the vegetables_ safety.
, it is undeniable that city dwellers may gain many
benefits. To be more specific, when they are susceptible to life-threatening diseases
as lung cancer or heart attacks, they will be treated in well-known hospitals specializing in treating these illnesses and the successful treatment_s possibility is high.
, in the case that
want to improve their well-being, they can get access easily to all the amenity in their
as fitness
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or swimming pools.
In conclusion, with all the reasons mentioned above,
settling down in
has huge
benefits, I still strongly believe that it is better to have a healthy lifestyle in rural areas.
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