Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Other believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

In

this

day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on the opinion that it is easier to have good

health

in rural areas while other

people

argue that there are a lot of advantages about

health

when inhabitants settle down in

cities

. From my perspective, I subscribe to the former idea.

On the one hand,

people

living in the

countryside

may have a healthy lifestyle by virtue of the following reasons.

Firstly

, many records prove that the atmosphere in rural areas

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usually purer than the air in

cities

,

therefore

, residents settling down in the

countryside

will be less likely to be prone to

breath

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diseases.

Secondly

, living in the

countryside

will help

people

avoid suffering from illnesses in terms of food poison.

This

can be explained by the fact that they can supply safe food for themselves,

thus

, the food security issue in

this

area is

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definitely guaranteed.

For instance

,

instead

of purchasing vegetables in the market,

countryside

residents can grow them in their gardens, so they do not have

concern

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about the vegetables_ safety.

On the other hand

, it is undeniable that city dwellers may gain many

health

benefits. To be more specific, when they are susceptible to life-threatening diseases

such

as lung cancer or heart attacks, they will be treated in well-known hospitals specializing in treating these illnesses and the successful treatment_s possibility is high.

In addition

, in the case that

people

want to improve their well-being, they can get access easily to all the amenity in their

cities

such

as fitness

centers

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or swimming pools.

In conclusion, with all the reasons mentioned above,

although

settling down in

cities

has huge

health

benefits, I still strongly believe that it is better to have a healthy lifestyle in rural areas.

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