Deterioration is observed in almost every human body after reaching a certain age and
it is believed by some
that young members should be made obliged legally to take care of their elders when they face problems in physical, mental and financial terms. I agree with
statement to a large extent reasons for which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
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reason for my agreement is that laws would make young
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make plans that involve securing not only their own
but
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their parents. Usually,
take their needs into consideration while planning
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. Not many consider the fact that along with them their parents are getting older too who would after some time require some support finance and emotions wise.
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of a rule which mandates youth to take care of the elderly would help in safeguarding the
of those who have contributed
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the growth and development of their respective nations when they were still young.
Another reason why I concur with
view is that old
suffer from mental and physical ailments mostly because they have stress about their
. Since their body and brain are not in their optimum status they can’t help but feel helpless and weak. Because of
reason
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of
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suffer from diseases
as heart disease, brain
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, blood pressure and many more. If there is a law,
, that
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them their
, these problems would, in my opinion, reduce by half.
Though there is a possibility that
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of old
‘s
would be secured because of the law requiring young
to look after the elders, there has to be some other law too which asks young
to save for themselves to save their
. Because
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is unpredictable, one may or may not have someone to take care
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the
.
, I have one more suggestion regarding the laws to give, which is that young
must have a legal obligation of saving money for themselves to protect their
even if there is no young member in their life to support them.
In conclusion, having a lawsuit that requires young
to protect the
of their elder family members could help in giving them much needed security in their
years of life,
, there should
be a legal necessity for young
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to save some money for the life later.
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