Some people say now there is less communication between the family members than in the past.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Great changes have been occurring in family life since the dawn of human civilisation and development of mankind.It is believed by some people that, there is less communication between the family members as compared to the past.

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Obviously, on one side, it is evident that, In

this

fast pacing era, people are busy with their jobs.They do not

time

to expend with their family.The main reason for

this

thought

that is

, masses are busy to earn more money even after their job

time

.

Also

,some company gives extra work to their employers so in order to complete their works they need to extra hours to finish it.

It is

also

possible to say that, After the hectic work people are exhausted and not able to spend much

time

with their family,

as a result

, children left unattended most of the

time

and they depend on computer games which create

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mpact on their health.

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, looking at

the

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another fact , it is clear that , people are busy with their social med media accounts.It is mainly because

the

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social media gives lots of entertainments so they find pleasure on social

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For example

, In the past , all the communications were during the

time

of dining.

Now a days

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, dining together is an uncommon

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, which we rarely see in the families.

To ameliorate, it is clear that, in

this

contemporary era people are busy with their own pleasure.

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with the statement that,there is a communication gap between the family members as compared to the past.

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