Some people think government should ban dangerous sports, such as skydiving and rock climbing. Do you agree or disagree.

There is no doubt that government must have a check on activities that are hazardous to the lives of the community of the country. Due to

this

, some believe that the state must restrict perilous sporting events like skydiving and

rock

climbing.

However

, I disagree with

this

view and would

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explain why I do so, in

this

essay.

First

of all, let us try to understand why the public wants a ban on adventurous activities like skydiving and

rock

climbing. At a young

age

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there is a feeling to take adrenaline to its peak;

as a result

, youngsters get into

such

risky pastime.

However

,

this

sometimes results in fatal accidents and injuries. So, these

sports

are expected to be checked by the law so as to safeguard the lives of

such

youth and their families.

Also

,

such

sports

hardly contribute anything to society, which nation think is the duty of the younger generations. So to save them from the dangers of

such

fun and their role towards the community, the laws must strictly govern

such

sports

.

Now let us have a look at the other view, youth in every generation has pushed the limits of human capabilities. Athletics

such

as skydiving and

rock

climbing leads to develop a strong body as well as minds. With the increasing craze in the new generation, these

sports

have started contributing to the economy of the nation. Even young people nowadays are attracted to tourism with the help of

such

sports

. The modern gears have

also

made

such

dangerous

sports

into safe ones;

for example

, deaths due to

such

sports

are way less the death that happens in road accidents every year. So,

such

sports

must be encouraged as per my view.

In conclusion,

although

sports

like sky diving and

rock

climbing seem dangerous to some, I would disagree with it because the modern safety gears and training have made it safer and they

also

contribute to the economy by encouraging travel and tourism amongst younger crowds.

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