Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many

families

teach their

children

about

a

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conducting that how to be a good citizen which is accepted by other

people

around them. While, some parents fail to teach them,

so

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they assign these

duties

to a

school

for teaching. In the following paragraph, a reason to support my opinion will be discussed.

When the

children

were born, after that, the

first

thing which

families

do for their

children

is take

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care

by

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focusing.

then

they have the

duties

of teaching about living when the

children

were grown. During the time before studying,

this

is an essential time to teach them before they participate with other

people

whom they do not know

such

as a fundamental of the living and eating, how to be an attractive person which other

people

want to talk together.

Although

the teaching from the parents is significant living in a community, the learning in the

school

is

similarly

essential living too. The best thing, which the

children

can learn, is the living with other

people

such

as the other students in the same

school

so they can learn about how to interact with other

children

, responsibility is a skill which they can learn in the class by teachers assign homework to them and

finally

, they can learn about a penalty when they not following a rule which is a regulation in

school

.

In conclusion, these two methods for learning about the good citizen have benefits in various ways. In my opinion, before the

children

will go to

the

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school

, the

families

have the

duties

for basic teaching, after that, the

duties

for teaching is not only the family but

school

which have many the teacher

also

must teach them about the living in the other ways that the

families

cannot teach.

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