Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in traveling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, people are argued about locate more apartments close to the central part of the city to replace the useless green area. They believe it is the best way to reduce the meaningless commuting

time

.

However

, I oppose the idea.

First

of all, it would

no

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place for workers to relieve their stress after

work

. It cannot be denied that spending leisure

time

at

parks

or gardens during the lunch break is important for employees, especially those who live in

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metropolis

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. They could chat with friends about

massive

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work

they are assigned or just complain about

working

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environment in the company. After that, they would have a brand-new attitude and get back to

work

.

Thus

, the

time

spent at

parks

motivates them to face

the

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challenging tasks.

In addition

to that, employees could

also

do some exercise like jogging or cycling at

parks

after

work

, which benefits both their health and life.

Obviously, there are various ways to cut down the commuting

time

for long-distance

traveling

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, eliminating green areas may not the ideal method to do that.

For example

, develop public transport

system

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like

metro

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the metro

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and railway could be an effective way to help people reduce commuting

time

.

In addition

, the bus company could increase routes for popular rental places, so workers, especially women workers won_t be worried about the potential safety emergency after

work

. Not only the public transport could help to tackle the issue, but

also

the companies themselves could adjust their management system, meanwhile, offering more flexible regulations of taking attendance.

For instance

, many companies nowadays encourage to use

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methods to share messages, through emails or video calls. For them, it is not necessary to show up every day with

fixed

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timetable.

In conclusion, on the

whole

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I would

favor

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to maintain

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the green are among busy commercial and businesses, and leave some space for people as recreational grounds, relocating

parks

and gardens may not the ideal way to handle the real issue

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