The purpose of a businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree.

There is no doubt that one of the most important

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for businesses is to make money.

However

, it is becoming common to hear people talking about how they should concentrate only on

this

,

instead

of the social responsibilities that companies have or the quality of the service they offer. I believe that

business

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should have more presence in

the

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society than just make money.

It is a well-known fact that any company must make money in order to keep running in

business

and

also

be able to compete with others.

In addition

, we can´t deny that

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main reason for companies to focus on

this

, is because they have to cover the employee wages, the payments for the buildings or vehicles and their maintenance. It is important to understand that the key

for

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a successful

business

is having a good financial result every month.

On the other side of

this

argument, I believe that the owners of the companies have an important social obligation. From my point of view, one of the most significant is the way they treat their employees, they should always try to ensure their safety and never exploit them. Another thing to consider is the impact they have

in

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the society around them. I think that

business

should contribute with the local projects

such

as

,

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the environmental, the charity or the educational initiatives.

As a conclusion, it is important to realize as I mention before that good profits are the key

for

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a successful

business

,

however

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I strongly believe that the owners must ensure that their employees aren´t exploited.

In addition

, they should try to put the same importance

to

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their social obligation as they do

to

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their financial goals.

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