The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The below table highlights

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of the workforce in the US based on their origin over the past

Last

year. The report consists of a total statistic of the female and male teams. The

First

data shows the total figure of

an employed and unemployed teams

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of foreign origin while the

second

analysis was related to US nationality.

Firstly

, the table begins with data that provided the foreign employment status in the US

last

year. The total figure of

workers

in the workforce was 24,357 while the majority of works were dominated by males compared to females.

As a result

, the ratio of unemployment was higher in females with 11.1%.

In addition

, it had predicted that the most participated

workers

were between the ages of 35-44 which

Also

highlighted the lowest rate of 9.0 % of unemployment.

On the other hand

the

second

table analysis the figures for total

workers

of US nationality over the

last

year. The total of the workforce was 129,533

workers

, among the total personnel

of

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67,610 was male and the remained was female. Male

workers

were higher in all the aspects including employed, unemployed and even the rate of percentage. The range of the ages of the

workers

was above the age of 16 years old,

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the unemployment rate was more by 18.7%.

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