There have been some problems with the bus servicing, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company, in your letter: Describe what the problems are Explain how these problems are affecting you Suggest what you would like the company to do

Dear Sir
I am writing

this

letter to formally bring to your notice that your

bus

that shuttles between Aka road and Abak road at a service route for residents in Power City Estate has really been disappointing us for the past two weeks.
It is with great displeasure that I bring to your notice the tension and delay your transportation system have caused me for over two weeks now through her disappointment. It is annoying that your driver arrival the

bus

stop very late these days knowing that many of us living in

this

estate are

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servant

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and have to leave our location on time in other to beat the traffic. Not only that, every morning, they will never cease to stop by the filling station to buy fuel which ends up spending quality time on a spot because the queue is always unspeakable early hours of the day.

Consequently

,

this

attitude by your drivers is beginning to affect the trust I have for your service because I cannot imagine waking up as early as 5:30am and get to the office by 10am. It is unacceptable and against our company ethics.

In

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I have received

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from my manager which the feedback from the

last

one was a threat for 2 weeks suspension.

Furthermore

, my

last

salary was not complete because of my lateness to work. So it is very frustrating that your

bus

service is having

this

negative effect on me.
In my opinion, I will advise that your driver responsible for my route should be cautioned and let him know that my

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have gotten to that management or an alternative could be getting us a disciplined and coordinated driver.

Additionally

, your drivers should learn to fill the vehicle_s tanks in the night against the

next

morning to ensure

her

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passengers are early at work.

Also

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they should develop the habit of leaving their houses on time so as to arrive

the

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bus

stop timely.
I hope my letter will be looked into and as well given

a

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due consideration. Thanks in anticipation.

Yours Faithfully
Njokuocha John

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