Today, the high sales of popular goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real need of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The controversial issue concerning whether the high

sales

of popular

goods

reflect the

power

of advertising or the real need of

the

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society has attracted huge public attention and sparked a heated debate. Personally, I agree that the high

sales

of popular

goods

reflect the

power

of advertising and

that is

because in our day to day life we buy a lot of

goods

only based on the hype about that product and not because we need them. I will explain my reasons in

this

essay.

One of the main causes of high

sales

of popular

goods

is because of the

power

of advertising and not the real need of

the

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society.

People

around the world just buy

products

like shampoos, detergents,

sooap

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bars, beauty

products

eg, makeup, lipstick etc based on only the

advertisements

of the

products

and not because they are in actual need of them. The situation is made worse by advertising campaigns

who

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create attractive

advertisements

that are

targetted

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at

people

of all age groups,

adult

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, children. The results of a recent study in

US

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shows that around the globe the

sales

of

products

are reaching extremities only because of powerful

advertisements

.

This

is a huge problem as buying

goods

based solely on

advertisements

are

beneficiary

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for the advertising companies but malign for the financial condition of

people

.

Therefore

, I have included the solution to

this

problem in

this

paragraph. One of the main ways to avoid being enticed by attractive

advertisements

is to make a monthly necessity list and buying

products

based on that .

This

is a great way of knowing what is indeed required at our homes and how much we are spending

in

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a monthly basis on certain

products

.

Therefore

, based on the viewpoints mentioned above, I hold the firm perspective that high

sales

of

goods

is

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mainly because of the

power

of advertising. That_s why

,

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I

also

believe that

people

should adopt the solutions mentioned in

this

essay. As that would help them from getting robbed by advertisement companies.

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